3 strengths and weaknesses

#1
strengths:
1. Great hook
2. Correct APA citations
3. Very organized into no-academic and academic
weaknesses:
1. Redundant
2. Some quotes are very wordy
3. Some things were unclear, specific examples of bigger words.

#2
strengths:
1. Straight to the point, not a lot of fluff
2. Explains their quotes
3. Intro was very interesting
weaknesses:
1. Super short
2. Interview spanned over just one paragraph
3. no in text citations

#3
strengths:
1. Cover page, with correct references and page numbers
2. Very thorough
3. Organized
weaknesses
1. Not clear on academic vs. non-academic
2. Could have been a little more concise
3. In text citations

#4
strengths:
1. Explained the quotes well
2. Great intro
3. Great conclusion
weaknesses:
1. Used the word "I"
2. Some sentences are very choppy
3. Needs to proof read a little more

#5
strengths:
1. Correct use of APLA
2. Strong claim support
3. Good use of quotes
weaknesses:
1. Paragraphs are very long, could be more organized
2. Intro isn't very strong
3. Needs transitions

#6
strengths:
1. Very organized
2. Quotes were well picked out
3. Quotes were explained well
weaknesses:
1. Not a great grabber
2. Thesis was very wordy and confusing
3. Used "I" a lot











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